Score: 3

"Huh?"

submission: Watch Out Link!

date: September 13, 2008

It's an okay attempt... but there are many many many things I find wrong with this. Let's take a look:

Help:
I didn't like how the game just started without any warning or at least a page with instructions. You should definitely fix that. If not, you'll only confuse your players and they'll never want to touch something like this. Keep it simple, and assume someone who's going to play IS simple.

Sprites:
Not a huge fan of sprite games. Not only that, but they aren't even your sprites. Because this is your first flash, I won't chew this game out too much for it, but next time please put more effort into your gameplay elements.

For your first attempt, you at least learned to crawl. You started, and there's ALOT of room for improvement.

~R~

Score: 4

"Camel Hunting?"

submission: Crazy Laws: Arizona 1

date: September 13, 2008

Interesting as this may be, I think you could have done a whole lot more with this. All I saw was text, really. Not my idea of a good flash.

Text:
The only thing I can review here. Light Grey against black? Meh. I think you could have picked a better combination. Also, if you're not going to have an actual animation for this flash, try and at least make your text interesting to read. Yes, the facts they displayed were interesting and amusing, but the text itself was very dull. Maybe use a unique font that'll make them nice and pretty and fun to read?

That's all I really have to say. Despite the notes above, I did enjoy this. It's always fun to hear about wacky laws around the country.

~R~

Score: 6

"Harry Pottah!"

submission: Drarry food smex

date: September 10, 2008

First flash? Everyone has to start somewhere, and you're faring better than others.
I'd be glad to tell you how you can improve. Let's take a look:

Artwork:
It needs work. You have a great foundation, now let's build on it. Try smoothing out the lines some, especially in clothing. You should go for a few shadows and such other effects of detail as well. It can only help.

No sound:
This is a big boo boo with this flash. You should at least have something for the viewer to listen to or else it'll turn most of them off right quick. For something like this, I think you should try your hand at voice acting and see what you come up with.

Animation:
Fairly basic, but I can see you have an idea of what you're doing. Try making the movements a bit more spontaneous. Make the characters live! A moving mouth and arms every now and then still won't do it for most people. To put it simply, the more real it is, the better.

It's a loop:
It's okay for some videos, but for one like this I would strongly advise against it.

Humor:
Gay jokes... meh. You could go fifty fifty with those in terms of a score. You should just make sure your material is fresh if you're going to go in that direction.

So, with work, I bet you could submit something fantastic in the future! Thanks for submitting and best of luck to you.
~R~

Score: 9

"Fooled me!"

submission: Es que no me lo creo men.

date: September 9, 2008

That's right, you fooled me. I thought this was going to be your run-of-the-mill crappy stick animation, but you certainly proved me wrong.

Artwork:
Obviously, with sticks it's simple, but I did notice things like background, the ground itself, and the tree and such. I saw some attention to detail, and what that tells me is that you know what you're doing.

Animation:
For a stick fight animation, I was extremely impressed with how smooth this was. I don't see many faults, to be perfectly honest.

Music:
Invigorating! Made it that much more actiony and exciting. Definitely added to the flash as a whole and I think it's what'll score big points with a lot of people.

Because it's only a stick flash, I can only bear to give you a 9, but this was pretty damn good! You've impressed me, my friend, and I think stick flashes are actually beneath you. I bet with a bit of effort you could submit something very impressive. Thanks for submitting and good luck to you!
~R~

Score: 8

"Education! Yaaaaay!"

submission: Evolution of Mammals

date: September 9, 2008

Nice work here! I'm sure this flash got you a decent grade for your classes, however it has some faults when it comes to being a Newgrounds flash. Let's have at it!

Voice:
I found it to be a little choppy and quiet. While you got your information through, I think it would have been better if your speech was a bit more clear in this video. If you were too close to the mic or if it was the mic itself, I'm not sure.

Basic artwork:
May not be as much of a big deal to some people, but unless it's meant to be really cartooish, I like to see detail. A lot of detail. The more realistic it is the better. However I'm not going to sit here and type that I expect you to get better at drawing overnight and try again, but practice makes perfect.

Basic animation:
Basically, I only say limbs moving. The occasional transformation was okay, and I saw movement improve a little as it got toward the end. Same as artwork, I like to see detail and life-like animation.

Very informative:
Excellent work on the project overall. It's always good to see something educational once in a great while.

Calming music:
You had this throughout most of the video, and I thought it fit the piece well. Very well, as a matter of fact. Well done.

Quiet parts:
Ape to man portion of the video was quiet. Big no no. I would have at least kept the music going or had some sort of narrative about the stages man had to go through to get to where we are now.

And that's about it. you get an 8/10 for effort, informality, and the fact I love Biology. Thanks for submitting!
~R~

Score: 5

"First timer, huh?"

submission: Build An Axe

date: September 8, 2008

Well, in a sense I'm proud of you. Your first portal submission wasn't total crap or just a half-assed stick fight movie. I'm Redshire, and I'll be your reviewer today!

Music:
I'm a metal fan as much as anyone else around here, though I think choosing a song with less incoherent screeching would better your score, contrary to public opinion on such music. I don't necessarily have a problem with it, but I'm going to forewarn you that others will. Submitting content is, unfortunate as it sounds, all about satisfying the public.

Customization:
I found the choices you had for bodies and such to be pretty cool, but I do think you could've put more in here. Get creative! Make your own if you must! Take pride in something you obviously have knowledge in. I'm sure you could come up with some great stuff!

Basic artwork:
Again, not something I normal have a huge problem with in these kinds of games... but it's something as simple as this that can lower your score or even get a submission blamed. I would suggest perhaps paying a bit more attention to detail and give the player something that'll catch his/her gaze.

Practice makes perfect, my friend, and I see that you have some real potential!
Good luck to you!

~R~

Score: 5

"Ehh..."

submission: Chip in: Hot Chip

date: September 8, 2008

I don't want to blam it, but I don't want to protect it either... so I'm just not going to vote and give you the review. You're lucky, most people have just been getting the vote and no review today!

Storyline:
It was very lacking. Even for a short flash. All kinds of holes. Only thing I could really think to do would be to at least introduce the characters and what's going on. Some kind of title sequence, maybe?

Animation:
Could use some work. Could have a lot more movement to try and make it more cartoony rather than moving doodles, you know? Also, I think it could be a lot smoother. For instance, after the guy behind the counter shot the other and he was lowering the pistol? I highly doubt anyone puts a weapon away that slowly.

Artwork:
Very basic. Not that this is much of a problem, but I think if you could better yourself in drawing a coloring and such, you could make some great flashes! Also, I noticed you tried to use shadows outside the restaurant, but they were gone once we were inside. Continuous usage of effects like that will score points with most people paying attention to detail.

Despite the above notes, I give it a 5 for effort and potential. Keep working at it!
Practice makes perfect!

Thanks for submitting and good luck to you.
~R~

Score: 0

"Are you fucking kidding me?"

submission: Reunited in Hell

date: September 8, 2008

That's what I was saying after the 9th load bar, and decided to give the fuck up at the 10th. Who do I see about getting that last twenty minutes of my God-damned life back?

I somewhat appreciate the warning...it was the only thing keeping my patience.

Well gee... they said it was going to take a while... maybe I'll wait for this load bar...
What? Another one? Well,ok... I mean, it's just one more, right?
This music is kinda catchy I guess...
4 loading bars?
5?!
What the fuck!?!?!
...
...
...
FUCK THIS!

That was pretty much my exact words and/or thinking during the load. I just gave up on the 10th load bar. I don't even have anything to actually review except the music!

Music:
It was catchy... I danced to it a bit in my chair, but having it on a loop for that long made me want to rip my ears out.

Please, please please please please PLEASE fix the load! I don't care what you say, no game takes that fucking long to load. Seriously.

~R~

Score: 9

"I like it!"

submission: Journeys of Reemus: Ch.1

date: September 8, 2008

Great game! A good challenge and funny at the same time!

Animation:
Everything seemed smooth and well coordinated. Only problem I had was lag at the giant flying cat, but I think that's just my crappy computer, so pay it no heed xD

Characters:
They were likable. I didn't have any problem with them at all. A medieval exterminator and his pet. What could be better? The wizard? Flying cake? Killer slugs? Awesome!

Plot:
This click and go game actually has some sort of plot/storyline to it! I like that! Can't wait to see the sequel!

Challenge:
I'll admit, this got hard in some places. It definitely made me think differently than I normally would and forced me to make observations of what was actually around me. That earned some points too!

Humor:
The snake eating the rabbit/squirrel/whatever, flying away on a giant mouse only to be taken out by a giant cat... this game had its funnies and only added to my enjoyment.

Only thing I didn't like:
The text. I just don't care for text that you have to click to continue, or text boxes at all for that matter. If you want to make this a great game, I would strongly recommend trying your hand at voice acting. Of course that's my own personal opinion. I'm not going to force you to give them voices!

Overall, a good game! I enjoyed myself throughout the beginning of what I hope to be an exciting adventure. Enjoy your 9, Zeebarf, you've earned it.

~R~

Score: 7

"Not bad..."

submission: Popper

date: September 7, 2008

Pretty basic game, but it was entertaining. A time-killer, as I like to call them. Only thing I would like to note is that it's a bit TOO basic for my liking. Perhaps next time you could pay extra attention to detail and make this game more of an attention grabber rather than just move your mouse around and click once and awhile?

Of course, don't let my opinion diminish the fact I thought it was fun. I did, in fact, enjoy myself.

And see that? I didn't ever write a long ass review for this! I outdo myself, really.